Your use of two images that both DO… and do NOT… go together makes this a powerful haiku. I also like your use of alliteration (“she shifted,” “hear leaves”). You have clearly chosen each word with care; the words have brought me into the story. Bravo!
4 thoughts on “reeling with the news”
pure beauty
you captured the fleeing moment
Great! Really captures the complexity of the moment.
Your use of two images that both DO… and do NOT… go together makes this a powerful haiku. I also like your use of alliteration (“she shifted,” “hear leaves”). You have clearly chosen each word with care; the words have brought me into the story. Bravo!
Love the vivid imagery and emotions contained in so few words…